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Saturday 8 July 2017

Getting lost In The Lewis Pass Scenic Reserve - narrative

I hiked through the lush green forest of Lewis Pass reserve. Grey patches start invading the blue sky above. The chuckles that followed me became softer as I was carried by the wind. I turned around and my friends weren't in sight. My throat was drying up and my lips started to feel parched. Evening feel so fast and a blue spotted blanket was rolled across the sky. Dawn cracked like an egg and then I was awoken by the sound of rustling by the Autumn leaf carpet. I ran towards the sound then I saw my group of friends. "I'm SAVED!!!!" I screamed at the top of my lungs.

For this activity I had to pretend that i got lost at The Lewis Pass Scenic Reserve. I really enjoy writing that is why this has been my funnest activity. It let my imagination run wild and it was fun to do.
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7 comments:

  1. Ofa10 July 2017 at 14:19

    Hey Jeremiah, I like you short story. It sounds astounding. The ending of your story is really awesome. I like your title of your short story. Keep up the great work Jeremiah!

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  2. Victoria14 July 2017 at 11:35

    Hi Jeremiah!
    Your short description about how you would feel, see, and do if you got lost was very detailed. I loved the intro to your description. I can just imagine it happening as I read it, it is amazingly detailed. Keep up that great posts!

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  3. Ohhsen16 July 2017 at 14:02

    Hi Jeremiah. They story you have wrote is really great. You have one spelling mistake. Other than that you did great. Keep up the great work.

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  4. daniel17 July 2017 at 19:42

    Hey Jeremiah
    The story you wrote is amazing. The best part (In my opinion) was when you wrote 'Dawn cracked like an egg and then I was awoken by the sound of rustling by the autumn leaf carpet' - great use of a simile! Well done.
    Daniel

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  5. aminiasi19 July 2017 at 11:04

    Hello Jeremiah, you have written a wonderful story. You have used all different types of punctuation and that made it sound more interesting. I found a mistake so remember to proof read your work before you publish it on your blog. My favourite part in your story was 'Grey patches start invading the blue sky above'. Keep up the amazing work.

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  6. Unknown19 July 2017 at 12:37

    Hi Jeremiah!

    This is a really creative story! Nice job! I especially liked the use of all your adjectives to make your story more interesting...

    Well done!

    Nicky :)

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  7. Eric21 July 2017 at 12:44

    Hi Jeremiah,
    I like your story it sounds really cool. Great work on completing this activity.
    Eric

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